review pick up for when hate turns to love

Title: When Hate Turns Into Love
Author: Shygirl
Link: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/Shygirl
Reviewer: cuppycake@Candy Land

Title: 2/5The title was too common. It wasn't very eye-catching either. If I was browsing through the list of fanfictions, honestly, I don't think I would enter this fanfiction. There are many fanfictions out there with this similiar title. You could have thought of something more unique & different to catch people's attention in reading your story.

Forewords: 6/10The forewords wasn't that good. You should have described the characters even more. Or maybe write a prologue. It could make readers more interested in your story.

Poster/Background: 5/10It was too messy. Especially the background, I couldn't read some parts because of the images.

Plot: 10/20Honestly, I think its too simple and common. The plot is used in may other fanfictions and its nothing new to many readers.

Creativity/Originality: 5/10Like I just said, it wasn't creative nor original. The whole story was about Yuri and Donghae fighting only, there wasn't many interesting parts. It jumped really fast too, like how Donghae started liking Yuri. But there wasn't much description about him liking her.

Flow: 3/5It was boring at first for they were only fighting most of the time. I was suprised when you worte Donghae fell in love with Yuri just like that.

Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 7/10There were quite a lot of spelling mistakes. Plus, you didn't put capital letter for the first alphabet of a new sentence. Here are some examples:
i bet your wondering why hate the innocent guy?
I bet you're wondering why I hate this innocent guy?
since we've started high school he acts all suffisticated, and mature like he's so special, but in reality he's a loser.
Since we've started high school, he acts all sofisticated and mature like he's so special. But in reality, he's a loser.
he flirts with girls to get theri attention and admiration.
He flirts with girls to get their attention and admiration.
i started to groan just realizing my next class was gym.i hate gym it's the worst class anyone could of invented.
I started to groan as I realised my next class was gym class. I hate gym class. Its the worst class anyone could have invented.
even a old sweaty guy with hairy arm pits looks sexier than the dude.
Even an old sweaty guy with hairy armpits can look sexier than the dude.
"yuri your crazy, how could you hate donghae. you know sometimes i think your from a different plant," said ayu.
" Yuri you're crazy, how could you hate Donghae? You know sometimes, I think you're from a different planet, " said Ayu.

Characterization/Details: 5/10It wasn't good at all. There weren't much details about the characters.

Writing Style: 7/10I didn't enjoy it for there weren't any capital letters at all. But I laughed at some parts though.

Overall Enjoyment: 3/5It was overall okay, just that because of the background, I couldn't really view what you were writting about.

Sub Total: 58/100

Bonus: 2/5I liked how it was from Yuri's POV, I laughed at some parts due to Yuri's sarcasm. It was funny how she cursed all the time too.
Total: 60/100